Dangling and misplaced modifiers are discussed at length in usage
guides partly because they are very common and partly because there are
many different kinds of them. But it is not necessary to understand the
grammatical details involved to grasp the basic principle: words or
phrases which modify some other word or phrase in a sentence should be
clearly, firmly joined to them and not dangle off forlornly on their
own.
Sometimes the dangling phrase is simply too far removed from
the word it modifies, as in “Sizzling on the grill, Theo smelled the
Copper River salmon.” This makes it sound like Theo is being barbecued,
because his name is the nearest noun to “sizzling on the grill.” We need
to move the dangling modifier closer to the word it really modifies:
“salmon.” “Theo smelled the Copper River salmon sizzling on the grill.”
Sometimes
it’s not clear which of two possible words a modifier modifies:
“Felicia is allergic to raw apples and almonds.” Is she allergic only to
raw almonds, or all almonds—even roasted ones? This could be matter of
life and death. Here’s a much clearer version: “Felicia is allergic to
almonds and raw apples.” “Raw” now clearly modifies only “apples.”
Dangling
modifiers involving verbs are especially common and sometimes difficult
to spot. For instance, consider this sentence: “Having bought the
harpsichord, it now needed tuning.” There is no one mentioned in the
sentence who did the buying. One way to fix this is to insert the name
of someone and make the two halves of the sentence parallel in form:
“Wei Chi, having bought the harpsichord, now needed to tune it.” If you
have a person in mind, it is easy to forget the reader needs to be told
about that person; but he or she can't be just “understood.”
Here’s
another sentence with a dangling modifier, in this case at the end of a
sentence: “The retirement party was a disaster, not having realized
that Arthur had been jailed the previous week.” There is nobody here
doing the realizing. One fix: “The retirement party was a disaster
because we had not realized that Arthur had been jailed the previous
week.”
Using passive verbs will often trip you up: “In reviewing
Gareth’s computer records, hundreds of hours spent playing online games
were identified.” This sort of thing looks fine to a lot of people and
in fact is common in professional writing, but technically somebody
specific needs to be mentioned in the sentence as doing the identifying.
Inserting a doer and shifting to the active voice will fix the problem.
While we’re at it, let’s make clear that Gareth was doing the playing:
“The auditor, in checking Gareth’s computer records, identified hundreds
of hours that he had spent playing online games.”
Adverbs like
“almost,” “even,” “hardly,” “just,” “only,” and “nearly,” are especially
likely to get stuck in the wrong spot in a sentence. “Romeo almost
kissed Juliet as soon as he met her” means he didn’t kiss her—he only
held her hand. True, but you might want to say something quite
different: “Romeo kissed Juliet almost as soon as he met her.” The
placement of the modifier is crucial.
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